Thursday, May 9, 2019
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Hi, Alaynah! I really find an interest towards your background, it suits the theme of your story. I also enjoy the first sentence: "The ocean is a pretty blue." it helps me understand the aesthetic of the beach. What I think you could work on, is adding more punctuation, most preferably commas.
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